Shooting Plan Revisted

I have been checking my plans for filming, in order to be totally prepared for when I do come to filming, as a result I have found that my film trailer tells too much of the story, or has too much narrative rather than teasing the audience, and enticing them into wanting to find out about the narrative of the plot of the film. To deal with this problem I am going to cut out irrelevant shots in order to reduce time and create a trailer where the audience wants to know more.
Here is my new shooting plan:

1. Close up of man's face who is smiling looking into woman's eyes (possibly over the shoulder shot)

2. Close up of woman's face who is also smiling looking into man's eyes (possibly over the shoulder shot)

3. CAPTION = "When Love"

4. Shot of man in military clothing

5. From an embrace the man lets the woman go and begins to walk away (over the shoulder shot from woman to man)

6. CAPTION = "Is Taken Away"

7. Shot of a hand, writing a letter (to the man) [VOICE OVER]
A) FADED OUT

8. Shot of another letter again to the man [VOICE OVER]

9. CAPTION = "The Love"

10. Shot of man in grass with camoflage on face looking up

11. Shot of man at door of house - coming home (smart dress)

12. Man opens door to two army officials

13. Letter writing from man to woman [VOICE OVER]

15. CAPTION = [VOICE OVER] "Colin Firth, Emily Watson, Jude Law"

16. CAPTION = "Love Never Leaves"

17. Man holding woman, whispers "I'll never leave again"


As you can see from my original plan to have 30 shots I have become more realistic, and seen the realities of a movie trailer. I have halved the number of shots I am going to be filming, decreasing the time spent on it, and increasing the quality of the teaser trailer as it will no longer depict the entire narrative of the film, instead it now gives you a little idea of what is to come. I have also tried to ensure that there is the possibilty of the ending to be happy or unhappy, this is left for the audience to guess, as it gives them a sense of mystery and meaning/wanting to go and see the film.